RobThanatos 2008-04-03 09:26:43

i can spot 2 screw ups, no ones perfect

JonBro 2008-04-03 21:54:13

The guy with the gun is clearly in front of the one in the middle, making it logically impossible to have the gunshot fire behind him--That is, unless the one in the middle is jumping upward in front of the bullet rather than being right next to the door.

Also, why is the guy on the far left lying down AND getting shot at the same time? Wouldn't the shot have to impact him and then RESULT in the guy falling over? It seems as though he was in the middle of falling over dead when he was shot, which (if that is the case) would have made it pointless to shoot him.

Of course, I've never actually seen the approximately 50-frame movie that you've made, so I could be entirely wrong about everything in the screenshot. The guy on the left could very well have been getting shot multiple times in the exact same place on his head, straight to the ground. The person in the middle could very well have been a hologram.

Besides the minor errors which make the screenshot look like an optical illusion or a physically impossible picture in terms of depth perception and sense, it looks pretty good. Try to work a bit harder on the layers and I think you'll have it! I'm sorry if I ever seemed to be a bit negative in my critiquing, as I was mostly just trying to help.

If it makes you feel any better, if I tried making this at the age of 11, it would have looked a billion times worse than this! =P

Good luck on future works!
-JonBro

STeeLRaTnl 2008-04-04 17:17:58

you suck ^_^

Geoplex 2008-04-04 23:45:15

Ouch. That looks like it would hurt O_o

Fro 2008-04-05 09:44:19

I'm giving away alternate accounts on my userpage. The last two accounts are AmericanHistoryX and ExperiencePoints. Come and compete for the last two names.

MattehX9 2008-04-05 20:44:43

Get off newgrounds little boy... Your just 11 years old